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Message strategies:
Writing Routine Replies; Completing: Evaluating Content, Organization, and Tone.
1. Analyze the strengths and weaknesses of this message and then revise it so that it follows business guidelines for responding to request for recommendations, make corrections as necessary:
Your letter to Kunitake Ando, president of Sony, was forwarded to me because I am the human resources director. In my job as head of HR, I have access to performance reviews for all of the Sony employees in the United States. This means, of course that I would be the person best qualified to answer your request for information on Nick Oshinski.In your letter of the 15th, you asked about Nick Oshinski’s employement record with us because he has applied to work for your company. Mr. Oshinski was employed with us from January 5, 2004, until March 1, 2014. During that time, Mr. Oshinski received rating ranging from 2.5 up to 9.6 with 10 being the top score. As you can see, he must have done better reporting to some managers than to others. In addition, he took all vacation days, which is a bit unusual. Although I did not know Mr. Oshinski personally, I know that our best workers seldom use all the vacation time they earn. I do not know if that applies in this case.In summary, Nick Oshinski performed his tasks well depending on who managed him.

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Answer:

Please see below

Explanation:

LETTER OF RECOMMENDATION - ODHINSKI

Mr. Oshinski was our staff for almost ten (10) years where he resigned effective March 01, 2014. He is someone that learns on the job depending on the supervisor been assigned to him and that also shows in his performance review.

Based on this, he has our recommendation.

Thank you

Head of HR

Sony USA

Explanation:

Good tips are;

Use direct approach

Be consise

End up in a positive note

Rewriting the letter;

Reference to your letter to Kunitake Ando asking about the feedback of our employee, Mr Nick Oshinski is a good resource however his performance has varied in our organization depending upon his role and immediate manager.

Mr Nick had worked in the company since last 10 years and received rating ranging from 2.5 up to 9.6 with 10 being the top score

One unusual thing about him is that he mostly uses all his vacations in a year.

I hope i have answered your query and hope that our feedback shall remain confidential also

Feel free to reach me again.

Best regards,

HR director

Sony USA