Read this sentence from a student essay: "I notice that a subgroup of the populace is amenable with regard to
students' extracurricular initiatives." Which revision
makes the sentence clearer and more concise?
A subgroup of the community will think of new thoughts.
Some people are open to new ideas for after-school activities.
It's obvious to me that a small group is willing to consider experimental ideas.
O There are some original thoughts for experimental after-school ideas, but one must wonder how they can be
implemented.