02.10 Kick It Up a Notch

PLZ DO THE REVISED PARAGRAPH AND THE REFLECTION

IF YOU DONT KNOW HOW TO DO THIS DONT ANSWER THE QUESTION U WILL BE REPORTED IF U DO

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You will revise one body paragraph from your informational article and write a reflection paragraph in which you explain the revisions you made.
View the grading rubric as you complete your work. This is your guide to a super submission.
Choose one body paragraph from your informational article to revise.
Copy this paragraph into a new document.
Review your paragraph for coherence. Make sure you have a topic sentence and supporting ideas for this topic.
Combine two or more sentences in your paragraph for varied syntax.
Review your paragraph for correct English language conventions. Correct any errors. Write a short reflection paragraph on the revisions you made, describing the changes you made and how these changes improve your writing.
the original paragraph
the revised paragraph
the reflection on the changes you have made
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original paragraph-
Have you ever seen a vulture before? Well even if you haven’t you have most likely seen an image of the bald creature. These birds feed of dead animal’s carcasses, making them ‘’a necessary and positive part of nature,’’ says M.E White, author of ‘’Vultures make life difficult’’.
These birds have inflicted damage on neighborhoods by, destroying car’s paint, nib
bling the wheels, and chewing the caulking on the windows. Putting a stop to their
detriment to peoples properties is crucial. Putting up deterrents and even contacting the U.S Wildlife Service are options to help stop these vultures from causing
more damage to our homes.


revised paragraph-




reflection-